RohitAgarwal

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Hello Rohit,

Thank you for your work on this task; I appreciate your efforts.

At the moment, your essay is split into 2 main parts: the introductory paragraph, and the list of suggestions and things to improve. The introduction is good, but the second part (which is the core of the content) needs to be expanded.

You've listed some interesting ideas in your list; what I'd like to see is a more detailed description and explanation for those ideas. Simply listing the ideas isn't as useful as explaining what led you to those ideas.

So, I invite you to try to answer the "Why" questions for each of your ideas: Why did you make that sugestion? What led you to this idea/suggestion? How did you feel such feature was lacking, or such other feature needed improvement?

Linking your suggestions to your personal experience will provide perspective and context.

For example, one of your items is "Provide a paid-premium membership which will include great features". What led you to this idea? What kind of "great features" do you have in mind? Why do you think a paid-premium membership would be an appropriate way to do this? Is this something you feel you would personally need or use?

I hope this provides some guidance on how to improve your essay. Let me know if you have questions or comments, and good luck on the rest of your work. I've extended the deadline to give you more time to improve and expand your essay. guillom 14:18, 1 December 2013 (UTC)